In that moment before grief
When you have a hold on something
-it could be anything-
or a sheet of paper,
You release your grip in an instant.
Time does not continue,
yet the object falls away.
Not like dropping a ball,
with a child’s anticipation of return.
Neither as with a moment of revelation,
or when gasps follow a feverish plea
It is different.
It is a moment we cannot predict,
unable to stage a photograph
of the way the touch vanishes
and grasp fails,
yet the burden of loss enfolds.
Lovely poem. I love the choice of flowing words, and especially like the line “maybe carrots” because of its surprise, for the words “carrots” is unexpected.
I agree totally with this comment – especially on the “carrots” as it brought me up short, in a good way. Which fits so well with the concept.
Thanks so much for your comment. I’m glad this poem resonated.
Thanks for visiting and commenting on the poem. I’m glad you liked the use of the carrots. My intension was to have something unusual in the imagery to illustrate the grasped object. It is unexpected, as you say.Thanks!
yes, the carrots make this poem. way cool. (consider letting the first stanza stand alone. more power to the “carrots”…that punch is fully felt that way.)
yes, the carrots make this poem. way cool. carrots are every day and never braced for grief or tragedy. carrots are innocent. your instinct to include carrots further illustrates the poet/artist in you.
(consider letting the first stanza stand alone. more power to the “carrots”…that punch is fully felt that way.)
Thanks Sherry. The carrots do show the everyday. Unexpected things can happen in the midst of everyday. That was exactly my point. I’m glad you liked the poem.